Wummmm….I ran as fast as my legs could carry me…for a while,I
wondered why I dint represent nigeria at the Olympics. I kept running…I still
cannot remember how I made it to the ground floor without the elevator. I know I
am strong…but never realized the twenty-sixth floor was not so far from the
ground. Ooh… I stopped for a while to see if wale was running after me…maybe
trying to say he is sorry. Disappointed, I turned back and continued… I couldn’t
really explain why…but I just kept running. Hot tears rushed down my checks…how
can wale sleep with his cousin? Why dint he chase me? Where did our love affair
go wrong? I kept crying…yelling at the top of my voice as I ran like a mad
woman.
Oyingbo oyingbo…oyingbo…it
was the voice of a bus conductor…I rushed in with immediate effect…I had to
leave…to get home and continue crying… NO WONDER HE DINT INTRODUCE ME TO HIS
FAMILY MEMBERS…HE WAS PLAYING ME…WHY DINT I NOTICE? I AM SUCH A FOOL…It took me
about 10minutes to realized that my house was in park view estate, ikoyi … I mean,
why did I board oyingbo bus from obalande…why did I even board a bus in the
first place…after all, I had a car. Owa ooo…I screamed at the conductor. “owa
kee…aunty you want make lastma catch me? Abeg abeg,no put san-san for my garri
ooo… I no want fashola trouble”…he said. “whats my business…just let me out”…
“can you hear me?”…the
very smooth and gentle voice asked. I opened my eyes and I noticed I was in a
small room…the room was painted in white. I also noticed that the man with the
gentle voice wore a white garment. Instantly I screamed, “am I in heaven?”… “haaaaaaaaaah…
the man laughed…. “heaven?... why would you think you are in heaven? “haaaaaaah>>>he
laughed again… “am sorry to disappoint you but you are in Merryfad hospital…your
card here says you fell from a moving bus into a deep gutter and hit your head. Can you feel any pain
around your neck?”… ooooh, it clicked…I must have forced my way out of the
moving bus… my god, what was I thinking…what was I even doing in the bus?… the
gentle man looked at me and said “I am the doctor incharge of this ward…so you
can say I am your doctor…you can call me dewale…doctor wale”. Wale wale wale…that
name rang a bell…before I knew it, I had pounced on him like an angry eagle
that had to avenge her dead eaglet…I was literarily going to kill him…but the
sharp pain I felt on my right knee stopped me. Ok ok, make I no lie…his muscular,
big and firm hands held me back.
I wasn’t sure why I attacked him…but I knew the name wale
influenced the anger…why was I angry?.. who is wale? I thought about it for a
while until the doctor…who dint sound so gentle anymore…called the nurses… and
before I knew it…I had dosed off. Doctor dewale helped me in so many ways…he
helped me through my recovery stage. Dewale and I became very close friends…he
told me how he lost his wife to breast cancer…how helping helpless people like
me was the only way he could get over their 6months old marriage. Wale had a
lot to say about himself…but I dint. I couldn’t remember anything…just that his
name brought me a lot of pain. Soon… I developed feelings for him… I mean…why wouldn’t
i? when he was tall, dark and very
handsome… are doctors really allowed to look dis good? wale was just so kind to
me…soooo caring…he even offered to give me a room in his house since I had no
where to go…I gladly accepted.
Its all coming back to me… you are him…I mean…his twin…
TO BE CONTINUED...NEXTWEEK TUESDAY...
TO BE CONTINUED...NEXTWEEK TUESDAY...
Good story,but u need to work on your plot very well,and also place more attention in constructing your sentences. Some repetitons which u used for Emphasis were not really necessary a figurative expression would have given an emphatic explanation of what you are trying to potray to your readers. Also aside from working on your plot as stated earlier endeavour to make your characters vibrant and unique. Thanks you can still be the best though.
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